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A family is a group of people who live together. They share the housework and take care of one another. I will say about my family.
There are five people in my family. My father’s name is Mr. Darm. He is forty-four years old. He is employee. He is handsome. My mother’s name is Miss Sompha. She is forty-four years old. She is employee. She is pretty. I have two brothers. They names are Techawit and Narinthorn. They are very cute.
My name is Miss Natnicha. My nickname is Num. I live in Mueang District, Chiangrai Province, Thailand. I’m seventeen years old. I’m studying at Chiangrai Municipality School 6. I’m studying in grade twelve. My major was science – math. My hobby is drawing pictures. My favorite sport is badminton. I like papaya salad. My favorite colors are pike and blue. I don’t like math because it is complicated. I don’t understand it, but I like English. I’m a lazy person like other teenagers, but I still have responsibility on my works. In the future, I want to study in The Faculty of Mass Communication, Chiang Mai University. I would like to be a film director. My ambition is to be a rich women.
On my holidays, I went to Chiang Mai Province with my family. I went there by car. It took 4 hours. My family went to make a merit at Wat Phrathat Doi Suthep. After my family had finished making a merit, we went to visit our uncle and aunt at home. My family went out for dinner at a famous restaurant in Chiang Mai. The food was tasty at very reasonable price. After that, my family went back home. I was very happy and had a lot of fun.
My family is very important for me because I love my family very much.