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[ICE ^^]

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To night I will talk about my biography .
My name is..............................my nickname is ICE
I will 17 years old on the 30 th november 2009 .
I collect very cute and soft bears.
 I love them very much.
I like everything  about English but I never forget Thailand .
 I am  excellent in English and I can  swim  .
I can play batmiton basketball .
I stay with my mom and my brother .
my father doesn't stay with the family
because he has hard  a great burden and he must work in Changrai
 


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[Dereana]

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[ICE ^^]

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[Dereana]

I can play batmiton "and " basketball . เปล่าอ่าคะ
"My" father doesn't stay with the family
because he has hard  a great burden and he must work in Changrai